Melvin Nakama: They seem ok, but Air is not a creature, If you change that one to a "what am I" riddle, it would sound a lot better.
Davis Zou: The first one is good this line:"We all need it, but rarely crave it."Just kind of gives it away.The second one is good maybe just change "Even money can not keep it from coming." to "Even money can not stop it. " Makes it a little less obvious....Show more
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